question archive Eight scenes of two peOple interacting draft: "Modern Lord of the Flies" Here is a draft of the writing about two people stranded on a island Scene One: Tim, John are on a trip, they wanted to travel from LA to Hawaii
Eight scenes of two peOple interacting draft: "Modern Lord of the Flies" Here is a draft of the writing about two people stranded on a island Scene One: Tim, John are on a trip, they wanted to travel from LA to Hawaii
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Eight scenes of two peOple interacting draft: "Modern Lord of the Flies" Here is a draft of the writing about two people stranded on a island Scene One: Tim, John are on a trip, they wanted to travel from LA to Hawaii. Scene Two: Talking about jokes on what they will do, they also said and talked on what they will do if the plane crashes Scene Three: What they were talking about came true and the plane crashed Scene Four: They were the only survivors on the plane, they collected things that they could use and found a couch.( Remember lord of the flies) Scene Five: A local tribal kidnapped them and wanted to kill them Scene Six: They ran away and made lots of tools they made Scene Seven: Got saved and returned home Scene Eight: They wrote a book about it
1) Write a critique of this draft
2) Quick summary of the draft:
3) Is the setting and action have effective MOOD?
4) Is there a good balance of narrative, dialogue (inner &
outer), are dialogue tags used effectively?
5) Do you like the story and think of TWO ways you think
it could be improved:
6) Please continue to write a short story based the draft
below, there must be a total of 8 scene and the theme
shouldn't change.
